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[caolaidhe]

story: in california. 16-yr old mello maroon narrating the story while in a nightmare of when he fell into the ocean and drowns then see`s his alter ego( flyingdog) the one that he`ll become then he wakes up and him and his friend friggy felines go to school. and are being bullied by a bully then ignore him. then after school they go to skate at the skate park then eat at a pizzaria and they leave then the bully and some other guys want to beat up mello and friggy so friggy punches one of em and mello and friggy runoff!!...then they climb a rooftop and to outrun them they must jump into the river with radiation , so they jump and get injured,drown and then get out and go to mello`s house and recover by using band aids and rubbing the radiation off of them. mello then has a nightmare of what happened and transforms into a beast-like dog. then wakes up, friggy and him go back to school and mello defeats the bully and leaves school. then mello realizes that he can fly and grow claws and has sharp teeth like a dog. thats whats going on so far,,so can u teell me wut i need to change and edit it

[macdoughall90]

I think it is o.k.,usually, when you think you most need to add or change something as in painting,you should leave the piece as is...

[diangelo]

I Like it, plenty of action. And it seems interesting which is very important in a manga/comic.